Ito yung comments sa next stop his happiness: Di nila tinanggap kasi sad ending daw nakakaiyak. Here are the comments of the editor: - nagsimula ang kuwento bata pa lang ang mga bida; they pretended to be/acted as Peter Pan and Wendy--invented their own Neverland... or aim to find it; medyo magulo kasi, theres this reference to heaven as Neverland - nagkahiwalay; lumaki, nakalimutan ng hero si heroine and all about Peter Pan (naging gang leader siya); in due course, naalala ulit si heroine, all about Peter Pan and Wendy and Neverland - nagkatuluyan sila, nagkaanak, there was an accident; naging brain dead ang hero, di siya mapakawalan ng heroine; then he woke up for a day, told her to let go... may sense naman kahit paano; then he died - sad ending RETURN Other Comments: - story is too long, almost 131K words... 655 pages; tell writer to try submitting something that is around 22K words only or pinakamahaba na iyong 44K; its bound to drag kahit gaano pa kaganda - dapat happy ending, a story doesnt have to be sad para lang maging tear-jerking or moving... otherwise, asahan na niyang mare-return ito - iwasan ang English; or practice the proper use of pronouns, otherwise nakakalito kung sino ang tinutukoy kapag mali ang gamit ng he or she at his or her :(
Posted on: Fri, 26 Sep 2014 01:16:43 +0000
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