From what I wrote this evening, it looks like this is another "flop" draft (the main idea is the same... but the wording still bothers me): #Untitled (attempt #2) He lay there, unmoving, for the split second it took for his mind to accept the pain worming its way through his system like a plague. ‘Where am I,’ he thought, grimacing as a pulsing agony throbbed through his skull. He tried to make sense of the painful sensations flooding through him, then gave up. What was the use? Gasping, he managed to turn his head enough to take in the iron bars of a cage, as well as a filthy floor. He shuddered, his mind scrambling to make some sense out of this confusing situation. Then his heart seemed to stop as the sound of footsteps drew near. ‘How come I did not hear them before,’a voice in the back of his mind queried. “Hey,” a familiar feminine voice from behind him called, and the steps slowed as if uncertain, then quickened again after a few seconds. “I said, ‘hey,”’ the voice shouted. “Come over here, you overgrown tree limb.” ‘What is she doing here?’ the helpless boy wondered, his heartbeat slowly returning to normal as the footfalls faltered once more. ----- "Overgrown tree limb" I like that!
Posted on: Mon, 05 Aug 2013 01:13:51 +0000
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