hear ye of this story...... of chaos and coffee...... that turns man to monkey...... though it sounds silly...... it relates to you and me...... just to have an eternity...... only to end hopelessly...... the coffee is actually tea... aye, it is not just a possibility...... the world can be a bit funny...... as it has been once too many...... what we see as great beauty...... often mask something ugly...... and not to forget sometimes scary... when the lead is another story...... the ones who are led get worry...... if one to trudge a path wrongly...... it is one soul who will be weary...... and if that is what it will be...... the next to ask shall we be sorry... knowing that dreaded reality...... we wonder what we should do really...... as the path to choose is many...... and to choose does make us crazy...... for the one we hope lead the rally...... is no better than you or me... before we lose our sanity...... and lose our serenity...... just pause, a second only...... on a day, so sunny...... after a night, so starry,... and just sleep without worry... A word to The-Angry Old-Kid Says: I have taken the liberty of compiling all your lines into one block so as to be able to read it more easily. Traditionally we should capitalise at the start of each line. I did correct two spelling errors but not in the Collection Title: ...of heaven and earth...when heaven meets earth... which I have now done. The only two other observations are that I do not know if it is supposed to be blank verse or not and, secondly, the colloquialisms are a little wild to an English mind. Example: a bit funny in stanza 2 and not to forget also in stanza 2. However, it is your poem, you should do with it what pleases you. davidleyman.blogspot/2014/10/my-name-is-number.html
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